Skip to main content
Welcome guest. | Register | Login | Post

Proposal for new Windows section

11 replies [Last post]
ariadacapo's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-07-13

Since I was locked offline the past days and that most of the current projects happen on-line, I worked on improving the Windows section, something I had been thinking about for a while.

I was especially cautious to address two thoughts I had when putting on my "average visitor" cap:
- How is it relevant to me? You have long complicated essays, they are sincere for sure, but I came to learn about "Linux" and I want something that relates directly to my computing, not a political stand.
- Always relate back to "how it reduces the value of Windows". I am going to work to get rid of it, so I better be certain it has not much value.

So I tried to simplify things. You can see that here: http://test.getgnulinux.org/windows/
The basic structure is unchanged. I re-named the sections to make them more relevant. The "Restrictions" (ex-Licensing) and "What about choice" (ex-No alternative) have very few changes.
The "what about source code" page is more about the "Open Source" idea, in the sense of security and "trust". The final, horribly long and complicated "Culture and Control" article becomes "Free Software, Free Society" and explains the same thing as before better.
There are quotes throughout to make the text more relevant and easier to read. I re-worked the "further reading" sections so they look better.

What do you think? What would you like to see that is not there? What would you like to have removed? Do you miss things from the current version?

I have the following issues:
- Quote in the "what about choice" article, not sure it's apropriate
- "Free Software, Free Society" is the title of Richard Stallman's book (which is brillant, in case you haven't gone through it). I think I'll have to check with him to see if this is appropriate.

Of course this is a "late draft", so we still have validation, spelling, language & links issues. But the content is as intended.

I look forward to read your criticisms
Olivier.

PS network access is scarce and difficult, times are hard outside of computing also - I might not be able to answer immediately

a thing's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-20
lotsa stuffs

1. Change the emphasis on "you paid for it, you should..." to "you got it, you should..."
2.

Quote:

Unconvinced? Then don't keep your software when replacing your hardware. Or don't give your software away after you are done with it. Your license says it may very well be illegal.

That's confusing. From the first sentance it sounds like you're trying further to persuade the reader. Perhaps a rewrite would do, but I think that paragraph should just be taken out.
3. s/no-one/no one/
4.

Quote:

don't get a right

That could be interpreted as you shouldn't have the right. Change it to "can't".
5. Introducing open source would just bring confusion.
6. I don't like having a section with the same title as RMS's book. Also if the title is positive then the red slash should be taken out of the icon.
7.

Quote:

withdraws so much from them

That's a little ambiguous. Change it to "withdraws so many rights from them".

a thing's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-20
Restrictions

1. « and » aren't used in English.
2. Add "[GNU]" infront of the quoted GPL.
3. Link to the quoted interview.
4.

Quote:

Haven't read your license in full?

That's worded awkwardly. Change it to "Haven't read your license fully?
5. The stuff in courier font and a yellow background looks like a quote. Change them to regular section titles.
6.

Quote:

legal text we have

Change to "legal text you have".
7.

Quote:

when mentioning piracy

Put quotes around piracy, to hint that it's just propaganda.

a thing's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-20
the more detailed page

1.

Quote:

It can only be used for pretty much anything.

Remove the "only".
2.

Quote:

The right to read

A short, easy to read story by Richard Stallman. Describes what influence restrictive licenses could have on your life.

Change to:
The Right to Read

A short story by Richard Stallman that describes what influence restrictive licenses could have on your life.

a thing's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-20
What about source code?

1. Don't use "software industry"; use "Windows security industry".
2. Rewrite of last section:
You can trust free software

It comes as no surprise that proprietary software is severely lacking in terms of security, compared to software whose source code is freely available (including GNU/Linux).

Free software means programmers are free to change the code to repair flaws. It means you can hire someone to really check how secure your software is. It means you can benefit from the contributions of a world-wide community to improve safety and reliability.
In fact, fifteen million users run GNU/Linux without an anti-virus, in complete safety. And the servers behind search engines and banks run on it too.
3.

Quote:

How can you improve on a salty meal, if you are forbidden to look at the recipe used to cook it?

Some people might actually like salty meals. Just in case, change it to "How can you improve a bad meal, if you are forbidden to look at the recipe used to cook it?"
4.

Quote:

What would you rather trust?

s/What/Which/

a thing's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-20
Free Software, Free Society

1.

Quote:

Anyone can have access to the whole trial debates and arguments in a Justice court, not just to the final deliberations.

There's no guarantees that's true where the reader is.
2. The original purpose of DRM isn't reasonable.
3. The i in ITunes shouldn't be capitalized.
4. TC is a subset of DRM, not separate from it.
5.

Quote:

A whole range of possibilities opens up for media businesses.

Change that to "A whole range of possibilities opens up for companies that benefit from restricting your computing (such as proprietary software and recording companies)."
6. Don't emphasize anything in the quote of Rosemary Bechler, it could be interpreted as renting is bad.
7. Change "now in our TVs" to just "TVs".
8. Culture and information are not products, they have been artificially treated by some companies as products.
9. Rewrite of the Right to Read section:
The Right to Read

What is the Trusted Computing world like? This is a short story by Richard Stallman that describes how this can affect any of us.
10. Rewrite of Why software should not have owners:
Why Software Should Not Have Owners

A pivotal text for the Free Software movement by Richard Stallman. It refutes arguments and explains bunch of fundamental ideas.

ariadacapo's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-07-13
thanks

Thanks ever so much for the wealth of comments...
I am printing this out to read and work at home on the section. Back soon...
Olivier.

tbuitenh's picture
Offline
Joined: 2005-12-21
A link relevant to this

A link relevant to this section: http://badvista.fsf.org/

libervisco's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-05-04
Wow, FSF has sure become

Wow, FSF has sure become pro-active lately. Very interesting site!

ariadacapo's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-07-13
improved version

An improved version is viewable at http://test.getgnulinux.org/windows/

A French translation is also ready at http://test.getgnulinux.org/fr/windows/

a_thing's many corrections were really helpful and some were so right! I tried to correct everything...unfortunately have no time at all online. This is extremely frustrating since I'd like to discuss and explain more.
back soon hopefully
Olivier.

ariadacapo's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-07-13
Online

Changes are now officially online (http://www.getgnulinux.org/windows/)
I will post tomorrow to explain why this change happened (so quickly and while other important things are pending) and what is going on with various changes behind the website.
Olivier.

ariadacapo's picture
Offline
Joined: 2006-07-13
Here is why this new

Here is why this new Windows section happened.

This comes in the middle of the creation of the association or "foundation" for the GetGNULinux project, something I keep thinking about since Gustavo's great proposals last month. So as I try to define more precisely what the GGL project is about, I have to express things written in the Windows section. I've been relatively dissatisfied with this section for a few months now, finding it quite unclear.

Also quite simply I feel my understanding and ability to explain of Free Software and how it relates to society, slowly mature.

Moreover, something happened which "triggered" the re-write, last week. I have been able to discuss just a bit with one of my teachers about Free Software, he knew a little about it and so I proposed to talk to my class about it. It was quickly agreed and so yesterday I gave a 5min talk to a class of 50.
Now this is particularly important, since the students in this class (including me hopefully) are all going to become Physics & Chemistry teachers in French highschools in the coming years. I felt they would be receptive to the idea of Free Software: they're going to spend their lives basically sharing knowledge (on top of crowd control ;-) ).
Education is a particularly important part of society to address. That a private company uses proprietary software is not nice, but nothing breaks my heart more than seeing pupils having to have Windows & Office at home just to edit the work they are doing at school.
Also, teachers have a particular ability to influence society (whichever way- I see both all the time), and this makes them very "precious" people to inform about Free Software and GNU/Linux in general.

Not only that, but I have more "ambitious" hopes.
Computing wise, our education system in France is a mess (from primary school up to uni). There's no official policy. Equipment is made of bits and pieces, software too, I see this as a big opportunity.
The part of university I'm studying at (called IUFM) is quite particular. It's made of "teachers teaching students to be teachers", many of these people also take part in defining the national curriculum. They try to improve the methods used to teach kids.
So in effect, talking to my class is like a small first step in trying to influence a larger body, a relatively influential one, and especially one that keeps asking itself questions (for example, in our building we have Windows but no Office (Firefox and OO.o). Over the next 18 months things may (or may not, but it's worth trying) go quite far.

So all of this combined added up. Last Wednesday I had this 5min talk scheduled for the next Monday and I did not want to miss such an opportunity at all. I went through GGL.o in French again, trying to look at it "freshly". I hated it.

Well I'm exaggerating of course. But first the internationalisation is really lacking. And especially, the Windows section was crying for an update. The content was good but poorly expressed. For example, looking at sub-titles:
- Licensing. There's nothing wrong with licensing at all! Free Software entirely relies on licensing to stay free.
- No alternative. But the first words in the website are: GNU/Linux is an alternative to Windows! There are alternatives.
- No source code... hmmm.. ok. Not very relevant to Joe User, but ok.
- Culture and Control. Completely meaningless title. Ambiguous, the whole article was well-meaning but way too heavy and sounding like a political essay.
So I re-wrote both the French and the English version throughout the next days (it's a lot of work). I think now it's still not entirely perfect, but surely much better. As I said I am completely out of network (basically I had guessed the password of a neighbour's wifi before but then it stopped working), so I could do little about project management and even email unfortunately. I concentrated on this opportunity and this is the reason also why I've done this without planning, discussions, etc.

And the talk went well.